A powerful opening to a longer narrative. This is full of menace, a perfect set up for what promises to be a very difficult story. OR, in my opinion, it could stand alone, as is, as micro-fiction — you have clear characters, clear setting, an obvious back story, a conflict, an open end. You could allow the reader to fill in the blanks. Either way, excellent, CJ!
I’m always amazed at how the innocence of children can be shattered and how adults can be so intimidating that nothing is said. I can’t wait for the next part, hoping there is a next part. Daisy needs revenge.
A powerful opening to a longer narrative. This is full of menace, a perfect set up for what promises to be a very difficult story. OR, in my opinion, it could stand alone, as is, as micro-fiction — you have clear characters, clear setting, an obvious back story, a conflict, an open end. You could allow the reader to fill in the blanks. Either way, excellent, CJ!
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This gives me chills and makes me nauseous. Very powerful for such a brief piece
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I’m always amazed at how the innocence of children can be shattered and how adults can be so intimidating that nothing is said. I can’t wait for the next part, hoping there is a next part. Daisy needs revenge.
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Wow, so many lauers in such a brief piece.👏
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This is a completely convincing illustration of the ordinary, and horrific, nature of abuse.
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